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You see, the thing my mama would never understand is that a woman needs to have her friends. I’m not talking about the girls she meets in a book club that she randomly signed up for online, or the ones she calls friends but never sees outside of the breakroom at work. No, I mean real friends. The girls she’ll always surround herself with, like a queen does a court.

  I had my girls, and my mama didn’t necessarily approve of them. She thought I partied with them too much, and often told me that I needed to give it a rest. But, these were my girls! My best friends! I don’t think Mama has ever had girls like I did. They’ve never abandoned me, and I could never have dreamt of abandoning them.
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   My girls were so unique. Each one was as different as the colors of the rainbow. There was Vonda and Teena, the two wild girls I met at a party some time while I was in college. Then there was the ever classy Winnie, an old girlfriend, who Mama started to bring around the house when I was a little girl. And, lastly, there was Patti, who just seemed to fit right into the group. They’ve been there through good times and bad, through celebration, and heartache, and sometimes  when I just felt like going out and having fun.
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   It was a Friday night, and we decided to go out for a girl’s night like we did every Friday. I’d seen them all week, but we’d mostly hung out in my living room each night after I got off from work. I piled into my convertible with Teena, and we picked up Vonda, Winnie, and Patti along the way.

  The sky was dark, and there were no cars on the road, so we blazed down the highway with the top of my car rolled down, and the music blasting. I raised my left arm, and waved it in the air with a loud cheer. I felt free, with the wind blowing through my hair, and the excitement pumping through my veins.

  Teena was sitting next to me in the front passenger’s seat, Vonda, Winnie and Patti were in the back. I cheered, again, before pulling Teena over to me by the neck. My lips met hers in an open mouthed kiss. She tasted a little like lipstick and lemon juice. I tried to pull her closer, to sit her in my lap. I wanted to kiss her again, but there was a shift in the air, and suddenly red and blue lights flashed, reflecting in my rearview mirror.

  I pulled over onto the shoulder of the road, and when the cute officer came to my window, I smiled at my girls, and shifted Teena off of my lap.
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   The women in the cage the officer put me in were all dressed like me in one way or another. The officer took my girls off somewhere else, and forced my to sit on a bench, trapped behind bars with these other women. He went on and on about how my license was suspended but I didn’t really care, because my girls were nowhere in sight and I was pissed.
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  The next morning Mama was there to get me. She had my purse and my phone, but the girls didn’t come out with her. She didn’t say a word, but when we started to drive away from the  godforsaken cage, I noticed that we were heading somewhere in the opposite direction of where my home was. When Mama finally turned into a parking lot, I noticed that the building she pulled up in front of was brick, and that men in white uniforms waited in front. Mama cried, and told me that I must go with them, and I was about to tell her that I was a grown woman and I wanted to go home, but the men pulled me out of the car and escorted me away.
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   I missed my girls, but talking about them helped deal with the fact that they hadn’t come to visit me. When she visited, my mama told me that they weren’t good for me, and I knew that she was right but it didn’t make me miss them any less.
CHALLENGE I had soooo much fun writing this one! This is for the second challenge of Flash-Fiction month. The challenge was to write using an unreliable narrator. I hope I did my job!

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Comment! Favorite! ASK QUESTIONS!

I  hope everyone enjoyed reading this as much as I enjoyed writing it! :iconbowplz:

So... Do you get it? Huh? Do ya? :XD: I'll post the meaning behind the story lower down. 

Thanks for reading this, if you did! :iconsuperheroglompplz: 

Thanks to :iconsurrealcachinnation: AGAIN

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don't forget the meaning behind this story will be posted further down

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Answer time! Okay, so I named my character's "girls" names that come close to the names of alcohols.

Teena: Tequila

Vonda: Vodka

Patti: Patron

Winnie (the classy one): Wine 

My character is an alcoholic and gets pulled over for drunk driving and her mom checks her into a facility at the end. TA DA! :D hope you enjoyed!




 
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Given 2014-08-07
Suggester's words: The Girls My Mama Warned Me About--- FFM Day 3 by RavenXNevermore is a brief and cleverly executed story about choices and addiction told by an unreliable narrator. ( Suggested by SurrealCachinnation and Featured by neurotype )
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FightingDarkness Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2014
very clever
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MysteriouslyDark Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow this is awesome~~ :3 
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RavenXNevermore Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you for reading! I'm so glad you thought so! :D :hug: 
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MysteriouslyDark Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
it's such an interesting concept~
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EverildWolfden Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Very clever! I didn't guess that the girls were alcoholic drinks, but I did guess they weren't real. I thought she might have been schizophrenic.
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RavenXNevermore Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Student General Artist
Haha! Yeah, I could understand why you might get that. :XD: I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for reading! :D :heart:
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Aryiea Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014
Haha it was what I guessed it was! yay! I loved it :D
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RavenXNevermore Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Student General Artist
I'M SO GLAD YOU GOT IT! I was worried I hadn't dropped enough hints. I didn't want to make it too easy, but I still wanted people to figure it out. 

Thank you, so much for reading! :tighthug: :iconbowplz: 
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Aryiea Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014
I wasn't clear on exactly all of the alcohols but I knew they were at least alcohol (or possibly some were drugs) :XD: Of course! I love reading :D
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SurrealCachinnation Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014   Writer
Congratulations, lovely!  :heart:
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RavenXNevermore Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Student General Artist
YOU! YOOOOU! THANK YOU, HONEY! :icondeathhugplz:
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SurrealCachinnation Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014   Writer
*Explodes*  :D
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AjthePowerful478 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014
Awesome just faved this
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RavenXNevermore Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Student General Artist
THANK YOU SO VERY MUCH! :D :heart:
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AjthePowerful478 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014
NP Animated 
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C-A-Harland Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Student Writer
Very clever, although I'll admit, I didn't get the reference until I saw the description. 
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RavenXNevermore Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Student General Artist
Haha! Thank you! I'm so glad you thought so. I wanted people to figure it out, but I also enjoy the times where I get to write things that aren't straightforward. Thank you so, so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :huggle:
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voisb Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
same XD
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Sanluris Featured By Owner Edited Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Oh, gosh!
I thought that the mother took her daughter to a mental institution for being lesbian because of how you described the "girls". I understand now though.
Sometimes that does happen, though. People thinking gay people need mental help, I mean.
I wonder if the main character started drinking the wine her mother bought and got addicted to it that way, or something. That's pretty sad if so. :(
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RavenXNevermore Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Student General Artist
First, thank you for reading. Yeah, no I wouldn't write a story like that :XD: I'm glad you understand now. It really is sad that things like that do happen. No one needs mental help for loving who they love. I got a lot of strange looks from friends and family who read my story when they thought she was gay, and that's exactly why I did that scene. :XD:  

In answer to your last statement, because of the way the story is set up I had to make it a bit vague. In my head she had a long history of drinking, which her mother expressed that she didn't like but felt like she couldn't do anything about it until the character was arrested for drunk driving. Her being arrested was like a last straw sort of thing. 

Thank you, again, for reading! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :aww:
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Sanluris Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Yeah. It's hard to write things that are probably controversial, but I think it's good to do. I have trouble doing it sometimes because I am kind of reserved, so I get nervous. But it helps to think it's not bad to write controversial things though, since they happen in real life. Reading your story made me think, I realized, and that's good. I can stand to think hard. :)

A friend of mine had a mom that acted like the main character here, just drinking, I think, so he worked a lot to take care of his little sister. They're grown up now at least so they can take care of themselves, thankfully.

You're welcome!
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Lucyann-san Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ohhhhhhhhhh my goodness the description makes a lot of sense.
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RavenXNevermore Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Student General Artist
Haha! :XD: Thank you for reading! :thanks:
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Lucyann-san Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It was confusing at first, but it was so cool! It's a great read!
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Avvoula Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014
I wasn't really impressed until I read the actual meaning of this in the description... Not bad, I like what you did there :D
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tuesdaii Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014
wow its a great story maybe consider a way to reveal the hidden truth within the story so its all the more powerful.
beautifully written love love love the twist of it. 
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Lekksatea14 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Student
aaaaaahhhhh brain just exploded!!! Amazing story!
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disneynumber1fan Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so amazing! I honestly didn't expect the twist... It's just so good. Congrats on the DD! :highfive:
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Sarah-Mohammed Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist Interface Designer
its just an amazing and mind blowing story...............................:)
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frostykat13 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow. WOW. Holy wow that was amazing
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jaegershark Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist Filmographer
She calls them 'my girls' like a girl with her teddies, hm CX interesting!
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Snowflake-the-Cat Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
That actual meaning makes much more sense.
Congrats on the Daily Deviation!
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Raptorwolf-AML Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
omg
That is some deep meaning
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AgonizingSwordfish Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Congrats on the DD! w00t! 
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LeVeuveNoireISBACK Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Student General Artist
*scrolls down* WOAH! :D ACTUAL MEANING :D
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LaughMakerAna Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is really freaking good! Totally deserves a DD! At first I thought she was mentally ill, but the way you wrote it is wonderful! Love it!
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NamelessShe Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Excellent! And congrats on the DD! :D
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KazumiJunPark Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Racing Girl Emoji (Aaaaaahhh) [V4]Where have you been all my life??? lol. This was amazing. I thought you did an amazing job putting the story together, and I do agree with people, it is very clever. I write sometimes, and I think the hardest thing is to get what you want the person to feel, or see etc. Maki Pout Icon Since ppl have different perspectives and such. Good job! Kee p it up!  Yuri (SNSD) 
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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combrette Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014
Congrats on your DD, I love your story!
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GreenAngel5 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I get it, this was good. Took me a moment on Teena and Patti, but it makes sense. Nice work :D
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Skythegamer Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014  Student Artist
you have earned my favorite Winner 
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zzhello22 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014
love it! :D
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Dragondud Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014
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ShadowedAcolyte Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2014
Yay unreliable narrators!
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aquineth Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
The sad side of getting cured.
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IndependentSoul97 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014
I agree, the names are so clever!  I didn't catch it the first time going through, but after seeing the explanation and rereading your story, I can see another interpretation (for lack of a better word) of your story :D
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RavenXNevermore Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Student General Artist
I am so happy that you found it clever. GOD, I spent all day griping about how I didn't know what to do. :XD:  . 
I'm glad you can see everything. Thank you, so much, for commenting! I appreciate it a lot! 

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